Wednesday, October 8, 2008

My Attempt At Poetry. . .

Today I am trying my hand at writing a response to one of Kat's (over at Mama's Losin' It) writing prompts. Of her four prompt ideas I chose:

#3-- Weave a poem that contains all these lines (in no particular order): "I tie the ribbon in a foolish way", "the delicious fragility of this travesty", "where we still laugh and wish".

A little background: Historically, Celtic weddings involved tying ribbons about the wrist that symbolized promises and vows made to one another. Hence the term "tying the knot."


A Marriage of Convenience

The sun glistens upon the alter and glows upon my gown,
The illusion of innocence and hope.
I stop before my groom.
A smile plays about my lips, within my heart a frown.
Like a rainbow to the future, the ribbons are offered—
Green. Material Possessions.
An indelicate snort for the reality of the one sided surrender it represents.
Yellow. Intellectual Exchanges.
All lost on the man becoming ever more tightly bound to me.
Red. Passion.
My hand trembles. My resolve quakes. My will presses on.
Blue. Love.
I close my heart to the delicious fragility of this travesty. I want it to fail. I need it to live.
White. Spiritual Oneness.
Does it even exist? This moment erases all possibility.
Hastily I tie the ribbon, in a foolish way perhaps—before I can undo what I’ve come to do.
And we are bound—
By the wrist, with deceptively festive ribbons, and by the law.
My eyes dart across the pews, catching on the one man this marriage has saved me from.
And a glimmer of triumph returns. Not joy, not peace.
None of those foolish emotions from childhood,
Where we still laugh. . .and wish.

20 comments:

Jennifer P. said...

ooooh! look at you miss historical romance novels :)! I LOVE this! I was stumped and decided to skip www this week, now i'm glad I did so I wouldn't be "competing" with this :)!

Fabulous job!

Anonymous said...

WOW! My writer's workshop wed sucks compared to yours.

Lacey in the Sky said...

When I read this prompt I thought Kat was possibly on the crack rock. I can't lie. BUT HOLY MOLY! YOU DID IT! & on top of that, it's good!

Anonymous said...

Amazing. That's all i can say.

Carrie said...

I am with Lacey - I thought, "Um OK Mama Kat, maybe you should rethink that one". But, you nailed it!
Love this poem. So much for plan to be teachers pet this week.

Emily said...

WOW, beautiful! I hope nobody else attempts this, because after yours anything would pale in comparison. :) Glad I stopped by!

Sam_I_am said...

I was hoping that someone would do this prompt, because I knew I wasn't! Great job!!

Anonymous said...

Oh, that is amazing.. It makes me want to go and erase mine..ugh..lol.

katylinvw said...

wow! this is amazing. way to go!

tiarastantrums said...

beautiful - I so can not write poetry!

Anonymous said...

I thought about this prompt for about 2 seconds before I realized that if those lines could be put in a poem it wasnt gonna be by me. You did a great job!

Just Lisa said...

This is beautiful! I wrote a poem too, but I'm not poet. I love yours!

Rachel said...

Beautifully written. Bravo!

Michelle said...

That was a great poem. Well done!

Rachael Schirano \\ Rachael Schirano Photography said...

i really admire that you chose the poetry prompt! it is beautiful!

LazyCrazyMama said...

Awesome! :)

Jennifer said...

Very good! You are a great writer!

KatBouska said...

Call me crazy you guys, but I knew I had to have some more difficult prompts in there to challenge ya'll.

I LOVE your poem. So far I've been very imoressed with the people who have chosen to do this one.

I wrote one, but the person I wrote about reads my blog...if anyone wants to read it I'll email it. Don't need that psycho to start leaving me hate mail.

Good work!

Jen said...

Fantastic! So beautifully written.

Lex the mom said...

Intriguing emotional imagery. Well done! There are so few of us who took on that challenge.

Yours is strikingly different than my own, but we share a tiny romantic aspect.

I look forward to seeing what comes next week.